Here's a critique i did for English thought it was totally awesome about a picture called Breakfast at Tiffany's

First thing that I see is the hovering donut. Why was it the first thing I noticed? Well why would I see the hovering donut cause it is totally like good cookies and I mean good cookies. Next thing I notice…..I think I found Waldo? Never mind not Waldo. Anywho the next thing is that it is not a hovering donut but probably a reflection in the window. Why did I notice that it wasn’t a totally awesome hovering donut? Because you said so. It has the feeling of the Twilight Zone. Hovering Donuts weird like us HUNS. Another title could be: The Hovering Donut From the Planet Dan’s Bakery. In closing I didn’t like it because it was to Twilight Zone.

Totally Awesome *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz

Here is one on the song Lights by Journey



Journey Lights

First thing I notice is it makes me think that the lights will go down in the city. Well it makes me think like that cause would the lights go up in the city? Well yes they would. Second thing I see is that it is a good style of music that creates that mood with the lyrics. If it was a different type of music it wouldn’t create the same feelings. It creates the feelings of peaceful walk though a city park at sunset. Another Title could be “When the lights go down to the city.” I just love Journey good group.


Hope you like it *eyes

Here is one for a movie called young at heart

Young at Heart

Total Awesomeness was the first thought I thought when I first say this movie because it is totally awesome elderly people singing like they were young again The next thing that I would say was the relationship of the members. Well the elderly need to have good friends and they all seem to get along together The three main feelings are: Relationship, Friendship, and Loyalty. Another name I would give this movie is “The Old and the Restless” I really enjoyed watching partially because there were good songs and good friendship.

Hope you like these

STOP DOUBLE POSTING! YOU CAN NOT HAVE MULTIPLE POSTS IN A ROW! IF YOU DON'T STOP SERIOUS ACTIONS WILL BE TAKEN!

Run Zorgon, it's the fourm Nazi.

Well Chad there all need to be next to each other so there forum Nazzi *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz *lolz

Plus they're here so i can hear back about them Im getting a grade on these so there

It doesn't matter, either one post to begin with, no separating them into multiples, or when you want to add something you edit the post!

Do not push me! I am not a forum Nazi. I AM THE FORUM RULER! I will ban you if you don't follow my instructions. Abyll has come close before, but he was lucky enough to have some power and influence. I will not exercise restraint in making you not be able to post here anymore. It is part of forum etiquette, not only is it annoying to post over and over again, but it makes you seem impatient and childish. As if this weren't enough, you do it in everything as if you don't even know that editing exists! I can edit your posts, and if you aren't careful I will ban you and make you look like an idiot with no way of letting anyone else know your fate.

I'd really watch your step for a little while, you've made me mad and I do not like being mad. Sinilli, this is a warning, if you promote such bad behaviour in any way again I will enact a form of punishment such as losing the ability to post for a week or two.

Zorgon, I may not like being mad, but I am in no way opposed to banning/punishing people who are rude and then mouth off about it!

*cough*nazi*cough*

ABYLL!!! Did you change Zorgon's avatar to Darth Vader!?! I won't ban you because you are an admin and an integral part of the community. But I may revoke your admin powers again, would you like that?

NO I DIDNT! ZORGON DID IT HIMSELF! (actually i wanted it to be admiral thrawn, but he said NoooOOo...) I SWEAR!

(Xfire chatlog:

Okay, then why wasn't it changed at 3:00 when I was just on here? Plus you still called me a Nazi which could get you in trouble!

So after all that anyone want to comment on the critques themselves then say so, and here is on i did for the poem The Road Not Taken


The Road Not Taken by Robert Frost

When I first read this I thought that I was at the cross roads every time I had to make a decision. I think this is because every decision we make will lead down a new path or road even less traveled.That the author chose the road less traveled the followed the less travel road and that made all the difference. I have the feelings that“Roads go ever ever on Down from the door where it began“. Another title could beThe Road Less Traveled It was mentioned in the book “The Slippery Slope” by Lemony Snicket”

anything would be nice
*eyes *eyes *eyes *eyes *eyes *eyes

I like that poem too
and chad you do act like a Nazi of the fourm

I don't care if I do or do not, you don't call me one and expect no consequences!

Bah. You are one.


I really did like that one by Robert Frost - ps: I Also really liked others by him, especially the one about gold... something. I dunno, but if you just search around you'll probably find what I'm talking about. Also, I think Robert Frost is more of an expert on what it's named than Lemony Snicket.


*cough*nazi*cough*

*cough*buzzkill*cough*

*cough*Abyll stop*sneez* whoa. ow.

Here is another

The Beatrice by lemony Snicket

It makes you wonder whither the sound of bells ringing is still a sound of children laughing or whiter there are still dwarfs and demons. It very well could still be the sound of a funeral. I really still hope that the ringing bells still will not remind us of the evil that still in this world today. Is the world that we live in dying? The end is near. The way I see is that the world is to far gone for our help….

With all due respect


Michael Hinkson

The Poem can be found at
http://www.freewebs.com/asouethelastsafepl...onplacebook.htm